New track - "Consumed"

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Permalink Reply by BAKARD33 151 on July 1, 2011 at 11:59pm

i fux with this...nice beat, flow, and chorus...good shit

 

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Permalink Reply by Axelrod on July 2, 2011 at 12:35am

Overall I like this track. I think your chorus is wonderful, although I was taken way off guard with your cadence beginning in the first verse. It could be because it's drastically different than the chorus or it could be because I haven't heard enough of your music to get your style. 

Some of your words get a little muddled for me and they are hard to understand. In particular, it seems to be the SH words like "She", or it could be just the S sound actually. Whatever it is, it's probably just an enunciation thing. I like the track though. Good job.

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Permalink Reply by Anthony Longo on July 2, 2011 at 12:46am

i like it. like homie said the "S" sound needs a little work but other than that its a great song. very creative and ur flows good as well. maybe you could have a guest spot as a 3rd verse? might be dope if u can find the right feature.

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Permalink Reply by fuzzy on July 2, 2011 at 2:18am

nice song, keep workin at it.

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Permalink Reply by Brandon Otterstrom on July 2, 2011 at 12:02pm

Thanks for the support! I would have to agree that my enunciation is a point to work on, but I'm sure with enough time and effort it's nothing that can't be overcome. I like the idea of a guest spot, though I don't know many people who are down to write a serious story driven type verse.

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Permalink Reply by a tie a on July 3, 2011 at 1:31am

i really like this track actually. The 2nd verse has a few parts where it seemed like you had to rush it a bit but this is solid. u got an mp3 for this, coz i'm really liking this. i'd want to collab but my chances to record are few and far between

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Permalink Reply by CrAzY~C! on July 3, 2011 at 2:45am

damn this is badass bro.... i love the chorus and the beat especially

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Permalink Reply by Brandon Otterstrom on July 6, 2011 at 8:28pm

Ya I got an MP3, but it's over 5MB so I'd have to email it to you. While the second verse is personally my favorite, I think your right that at certain lines it sounds a bit rushed. Just a minor detail but thanks for pointing it out! Criticism is much appreciated! 

a tie a said:

i really like this track actually. The 2nd verse has a few parts where it seemed like you had to rush it a bit but this is solid. u got an mp3 for this, coz i'm really liking this. i'd want to collab but my chances to record are few and far between

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Permalink Reply by trevor on July 6, 2011 at 9:24pm

sickness.

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Permalink Reply by amerikilla9999 on July 8, 2011 at 2:15am

nice work homie.  not just a verse on a random beat.  a real song with a vibe that you created...the hook and everything. u one of the only people on here that ive seen that from...i think you'd dig the track i made cause ur style..check it out maybe we can collab or somethin.  Mind Fucked (Prod. by Slantize)

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Permalink Reply by Brandon Otterstrom on July 8, 2011 at 9:04pm

I'd be down to collab for sure. I got a song in mind too, just hit me up and I can send you the lyrics. Check out my other track, Faded Away and tell me what you think.

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