My Rap
I been wanting to improve my rhyming skills and flow latley. So basically I just need your advice. This is what I wrote to the "Beautiful Music" instrumental.
I been lookin into rhyme tryin to find myself to shine
Like a torch in a dark cavern with no lit time
But its like the def tryin to read lips on a person
With full facial hair no teeth no spares in
But I be tearin till its a bare wasteland
But I be there in with skill paired with bass line
I be snarin people in like the great land
Not a trick like a rabbit but a great plan
Chuckin out bricks as Im burnin on the wick
Leads to the dinomite, BOOM still got uh grip
And thoughts to spit paired with alotta of witz
Ready to spit fissures shit like gizzards whip
Rip off the skin cause intense heat built in
Let the blood go no tampon filled in
Like a Champion just bang down hills skinned
The dirts like a skillet, stove knob tilted
Tilted like a helix as I go spill this
rough family history full of daily fits
Up in a mystery exposed young human sits
Listens and watches, reinacts this shit
Adds to his spittin see them actin different
Nows its all boring go work on his literate
Need some advice to get better within moment
Cause these ideas just be inside still roastin
I didn't record anything. This is just the link to the instrumental.
Views: 74
Replies to This Discussion
-
Permalink Reply by Jake Williams on -
it doesn't make any sense
-
Permalink Reply by VeetSkeetBeats on -
TO give you some info, its not that we can just sit here and analyze your lyrics. Half of it is how your style is gonna be when rapping, and also the quality of how it sounds. and dont try to rap over a tech beat because you will get compared to him and your not gonna ever top what he does to his tracks. make you lyrics a bit more meaningful like some shit ppl can relate to.
-
Permalink Reply by Shane on -
It does if you understand the metaphors, and VeetSkeetBeats I wasn't thinking of being compared to Tech so thats well noted. Thanks for the read.
Jake Williams said:it doesn't make any sense
-
Permalink Reply by The Crazy Englishman! on -
Fuck that, spit on whatever beat you like, so what if people say tech did it better? Thats not exactly unexpected, but dont duck a beat you like just cause of the negatives, if you feel the beat an do it justice, theres gonna be people who look past the fact someone else spit on it. Sharings caring haha.
Id say you can write well, but cant comment on nuthin else cause music=sound.
Shane said:It does if you understand the metaphors, and VeetSkeetBeats I wasn't thinking of being compared to Tech so thats well noted. Thanks for the read.
Jake Williams said:it doesn't make any sense
-
Permalink Reply by Nick Ritter on -
I love to rap on tech's song beats, i think it is beneficial because I know them pretty well. Your lyrics are definitely not bad, you could try adding more complex rhymes, such as multi syllable, but that will change how you flow. Keep writing and making songs and just do what you want man. It is a lot easier to write to stuff also if you have a clear idea before you start writing. Keep it up
¡MAYDAY! "Believers" Pre-Order Now Available
Rittz "The Life And Times Of Jonny Valiant" Pre-order Now!
Wrekonize "The War Within" Pre-Order Available!
CES Cru “Constant Energy Struggles” Purchase Now!
Kutt Calhoun "Black Gold" Album Now Available!
Brotha Lynch Hung "Mannibalector" Album In Stores Now!
Tech N9ne's Hostile Takeover: The Story Behind The Tour
Prozak "Nocturnal" EP Now Available!
Krizz Kaliko "Neh' Mind" EP Now Available!
Tech N9ne – ‘E.B.A.H.’/'Boiling Point’ Combo EP Now In Stores!
Tech N9ne "Boiling Point" EP Now Available!
Stevie Stone "Momentum" EP Now Available!
Tech N9ne "E.B.A.H." EP Now Available!
Kutt Calhoun "Kelvin" EP Now Available!
Ces Cru "13" EP Now Available!
¡MAYDAY! "Thrift Store Halos" EP Now Available!
Tech N9ne Blog
Rest In Peace To Founding Doors Member And Music Legend Ray Manzarek
Today the music world lost one of the greatest to ever touch a keyboard. Ray Manzarek, one of the two founding members of The Doors, passed away at the age of 74. It was in July of 1965 that a random encounter between the prodigious keyboardist and Jim Morrison would eventually turn into one [...]Tech N9ne Chops It Up With Fred Durst, Collab In The Works?
Does Tech N9ne have another collab in the works for Something Else? Out on the road for a string of live performances, Tech got the chatter going on Twitter as he confirmed a phone call with Limp Bizkit frontman, Fred Durst. We can only assume it’s for collaborative purposes, but who knows? Fans may recall [...]WATCH: Tech N9ne To Perform At Rock The Bells 2013, Performs At Pre-Party
We are proud to announce that Tech N9ne will be performing at Rock The Bells 2013! After putting in his work at another legendary hip hop festival (Paid Dues), Tech N9ne is ready to take the stage amongst hip hop’s finest once more in a celebration of a music and culture that has brought together [...]FIRST LOOK: Tech N9ne Shoots ‘Dwamn’ Music Video
Tech N9ne is cooking up Something Else with the first visual shot for his highly anticipated next album. Adorned with beautiful women, cars, and a tour bus unlike anyone has ever seen, Tech took to the pavement to perform “Dwamn” from his upcoming album Something Else. The video has yet to be completed but with [...]Tech N9ne Speaks On R.A. The Rugged Man, ‘Holla-Loo-Yuh’, Not Giving A F*ck [VIDEO]
When it comes to emcees other than Tech N9ne that are quick-spitting, hyper-intricate, and actually have something to say, it’s pretty much impossible to leave R.A. The Rugged Man’s name out of that short list, so it comes as no surprise that the hip hop Gods eventually brought the two together. On “Holla Loo Yuh” [...]© 2013 Created by Strange Admin.
