My Rap
I been wanting to improve my rhyming skills and flow latley. So basically I just need your advice. This is what I wrote to the "Beautiful Music" instrumental.
I been lookin into rhyme tryin to find myself to shine
Like a torch in a dark cavern with no lit time
But its like the def tryin to read lips on a person
With full facial hair no teeth no spares in
But I be tearin till its a bare wasteland
But I be there in with skill paired with bass line
I be snarin people in like the great land
Not a trick like a rabbit but a great plan
Chuckin out bricks as Im burnin on the wick
Leads to the dinomite, BOOM still got uh grip
And thoughts to spit paired with alotta of witz
Ready to spit fissures shit like gizzards whip
Rip off the skin cause intense heat built in
Let the blood go no tampon filled in
Like a Champion just bang down hills skinned
The dirts like a skillet, stove knob tilted
Tilted like a helix as I go spill this
rough family history full of daily fits
Up in a mystery exposed young human sits
Listens and watches, reinacts this shit
Adds to his spittin see them actin different
Nows its all boring go work on his literate
Need some advice to get better within moment
Cause these ideas just be inside still roastin
I didn't record anything. This is just the link to the instrumental.
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Permalink Reply by Jake Williams on -
it doesn't make any sense
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Permalink Reply by VeetSkeetBeats on -
TO give you some info, its not that we can just sit here and analyze your lyrics. Half of it is how your style is gonna be when rapping, and also the quality of how it sounds. and dont try to rap over a tech beat because you will get compared to him and your not gonna ever top what he does to his tracks. make you lyrics a bit more meaningful like some shit ppl can relate to.
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Permalink Reply by Shane on -
It does if you understand the metaphors, and VeetSkeetBeats I wasn't thinking of being compared to Tech so thats well noted. Thanks for the read.
Jake Williams said:it doesn't make any sense
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Permalink Reply by The Crazy Englishman! on -
Fuck that, spit on whatever beat you like, so what if people say tech did it better? Thats not exactly unexpected, but dont duck a beat you like just cause of the negatives, if you feel the beat an do it justice, theres gonna be people who look past the fact someone else spit on it. Sharings caring haha.
Id say you can write well, but cant comment on nuthin else cause music=sound.
Shane said:It does if you understand the metaphors, and VeetSkeetBeats I wasn't thinking of being compared to Tech so thats well noted. Thanks for the read.
Jake Williams said:it doesn't make any sense
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Permalink Reply by Nick Ritter on -
I love to rap on tech's song beats, i think it is beneficial because I know them pretty well. Your lyrics are definitely not bad, you could try adding more complex rhymes, such as multi syllable, but that will change how you flow. Keep writing and making songs and just do what you want man. It is a lot easier to write to stuff also if you have a clear idea before you start writing. Keep it up
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