Not my song...it's a friends, just trying to spread the music.
he sounds like a 12 year old with bad lyrics and no passion but his flow is good . keep going at it its just constructive criticism .
to be honest lets just say they both need to expand there form its not just about rhyming on beat. think of constructive patterns and lyricism. analogies and metaphors punch lines story telling, abstract if you go in that direction. speak from yourself pick one and run vith it.