Is This Lyrical 2
Last time I posted a verse on here I got some helpful tips. And I used some of them tips and am curious on what else the trtn people could give to me to help my writing improve. So although this doesn't have anything thats real deep or meaningful, does anyone think its lyrical and why?
Somethin ta come with uh head huntin flow, nothin but droppin the best I can go
Tuggin and sluggin and lovin and chuggin and snuggin and clutchin the pumped in no pluggin ears
Buggin confrontin me dumpin these bumpin schemes slumpin me comin weak just shit dream nothin near
Drunk with the bussin the led spittin flow, nuff of the gun poppin now rest be more slow
I arrived to the beat, so I could distinguish waves
Of bars then make the instrumental disintigrate
My main objective to murder the beat makin stabs at it
My tongue a mighty javalin attackin to pass the skin
Honestly still wanna make tweaks, godly astonishing feat.
Wanna make a verse so cold I'll be unthawing for weeks
Talk about pushing the peak, cautious when plotting on beats
Gotta make a verse so dope the beats drugs like weed
Constant practice the best advice when you look on the internet
Not much to go off so I write and I hope I figure best
Method to use but I greatly improved sense I first got interest and
Gettin a boost from my redundent use and leaving rappers inspected
Something good or bad to say or nothing at all, let me have it.
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Permalink Reply by Jordan McLeod on -
I'm not really feeling it. I'd like to note, that in some cases for what ever reason, sometimes its hard to tell which direction an artist is trying to go until its recorded in audio format. words dope or not, it also has a lot to do with delivery. don't focus on just one thing either. I did that, and ya i can write, but now im playin catch up with the recording programs, my flow and sound. btw. dont necassarily take my advice. its only an opinion and someone more educated or experienced may have something different to say. but i figured if at least comment since nobody has yet.
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Permalink Reply by DJ MAS MAJISHUN on -
shit was actually good bro..... your multi -syllable rhymes were dope, i like the lyrical content, you should have used your computers sound recorder and recorded this and then posted it........ alot of people that dont rap arent gonna get the rhyme structure and how things are supposed to flow...... if you dont feel like you can do it verbally then just practice it until it sounds coming out of your mouth the way it does in your head..... other then that homie shit was pretty dope.....
you should check out a website i use called letsbeef.com it a great way to get some critiques on your lyricss and/or music period..... if battling isn't your thing then you can strictly do cyphers. txt and audio, battles and cyphers..... check it out bro.
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Permalink Reply by DrMacYoHunny on -
Meh nothing special.
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